For me, labor education isn’t a difficult thing before I came to Chaoyang University of Technology. I thought it is just like doing clean school in senior. However, they are totally different. Therefore, I like labor education because it only be maintained one year. After I have been done labor education, there are both advantages and defects.
Upper classman will give gifts such as drinks, cookies, and candies when every stage is end. Besides, if your social ability is good then you will make many friends by labor education. Nevertheless, it isn’t a good way for me because I did my work without any partners when my first, second, and third stage. When I worked in four stage, I had a partner in the end. Moreover, I thought maybe I can make friends with her. At first, I didn’t know how to speak to her but I always did my best. Since one time, I hate her very much because she did work slowly and I waited her for twenty minutes. I lose my temperament. I gave up to be her and any partners’ friends. Now I hope I can pass the labor education and the reason is I can’t get up early. So I asked for leave many times. To sum up, I don’t hate labor education but it is hard to get up early for me.
2010年5月20日 星期四
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1. Why you guys always meet nasty partners like that?
回覆刪除I feel sorry for you guys. Yet, look at the bright side: you learned how ugly human beings are!
2. I like this point in your article: labor education is not difficult or tiring, but getting up early is! (So is meeting nasty partners!)
3. Please correct some mistakes I found in this article:
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1. Therefore, I like labor education because it only be maintained one year.
你這裡的therefore銜接得很怪耶 不是個是和這裏的linking word
2. After I have been done labor education, there are both advantages and defects.
應該寫: after...., I found both advantages and defects of labor education. (而不是there are)
3. Upper classman will give gifts such as drinks, cookies, and candies when every stage is end. Besides, if your social ability is good then you will make many friends by labor education.
開頭應該加個讓讀者知道你是要說advantage
4.
Nevertheless, it isn’t a good way for me because I did my work without any partners when my first, second, and third stage.
when改成on
5. When I worked in four stage, I had a partner in the end.
你可以寫 on stage four 或on the fourth stage
6.
Moreover, I thought maybe I can make friends with her.
moreover不適合這裏 換個linking word吧
7.I lose my temperament.
lose 改過去是
temperament改temper
8.I gave up to be her and any partners’ friends.
改成 give up+Ving
你的her應該是沒寫完
很有趣的journal 哈